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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

That first stanza is so delicious to read out loud (aloud? I never remember).

David Donoghue's avatar

I believe it's "out aloudly"

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

That sounds right. Maybe a little pedantic, though?

David Donoghue's avatar

I mean, "out aloudly" sounds like something my daughter (2) would say with absolute certainty while looking me dead in the eye. I wouldn't question it and just nod and agree and we'd be saying it that way until years later her english teacher tells her to stop...

... and then we'd still say it in secret.

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

That’s the reason that “pobs” (potty), “spangelo” (spatula), and “rega-lee” (regular) are still in play around here 😁.

The Sea in Me's avatar

All that's left unsaid.

I was settling into this, and wanted to hear more.

Lovely.

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Dec 21, 2023
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David Donoghue's avatar

Thanks Mike. I really appreciate the time and attention you've given my writing. It means a lot to get such an in depth response.

And yes there is a lot that words can't convey very well, which is something you miss these days as we are working a lot more remotely. You lose a lot of the unspoken meaning in things.