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James Hart's avatar

Yeahhh I had a feeling it was a dog! But it took a much darker turn than I imagined, too; surprising and fun!

David Donoghue's avatar

Ha good, I am happy you enjoyed it James. I don't usually find myself writing something of this tone but it happens and usually with a comedic twist - to soften the blow perhaps.

Anyway, I go where the pen takes me.

James Hart's avatar

Absolutely!

LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

This is great fun! I thought it might be a cat rather than a dog. One of our old cats—Cali—nothing was safe.

David Donoghue's avatar

Yea i guess it's nice to leave that open ended for the reader. Our cat is currently on a spree, almost worse when they are still very much alive and she deposits them on the kitchen floor 😬... I'm not sure I've known many dogs like that tbh

rena's avatar

Worse when you catch the scent and can't get to it...

David Donoghue's avatar

😅 yes... Kinda as if some food or milk has been left out but there is nothing that you can see... Start getting suspicious 😂

Carole Roseland's avatar

The picture was a giveaway, but great poem! I can’t tell you the number of beheaded baby rabbits my cat would leave on the porch. The rabbits have taken over my lawn now that she’s gone. Just one more reason I miss her!

David Donoghue's avatar

Ha! Yes I left the picture off for a day or so because I felt the same. I can’t imagine all the beheaded bunnies 😬 we mainly get mice, shrews and birds… once a glove… and another time a plastic robin christmas decoration

The Sea in Me's avatar

Refreshing pivot in style here David. Really like it. And the turn and reveal.

David Donoghue's avatar

Yes! And after we had just been discussing "the turn" and all... A lirrle clumsy on my part but was fun, and it just sort of happened as we had said is usually the case 😅

The Sea in Me's avatar

Just happened, very cool. Really well done!

Weston Parker's avatar

Very charming, thanks

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Whoa. I'm intrigued but a little confused. The opening stanza is killer (ha, ha, pun so intended) and I love this:

"I Watched them pull

their broken body

over the back wall."

But I sense I may be missing something.

David Donoghue's avatar

😅 thanks for the comment. Yes i'll let the poem sit for a while so as not to spoil it for anyone. ☺️

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Oct 17, 2024
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David Donoghue's avatar

Glad to hear it 😅 wasn't really sure if this would land with everyone. But if you know... you know. 😅

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Oct 17, 2024
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David Donoghue's avatar

😂 yes... Once found one, dry and dusty, underneath the rug in the living room. When we eventually found it I recalled a morning when the corner of the rug was inexplicably folded back over and I just fixed it without thinking... That had easily been 5-6 months previous. 🤦

Copious amounts of disinfectant and vanish followed.. a new rug was purchased.