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Mike Speriosu's avatar

I LOVE this! What gorgeous rhythm and woven rhymes. What a sweet sentiment. This would kill as spoken word.

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David Donoghue's avatar

Yes my time is so limited that I currently don't even consider recording it. But I do read it out loud as I write so it really is just about convenience. I intend to do revordings of the back catalogue in future.

Great to hear from you Mike!

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Sarah Howard Lapine's avatar

This is the sweetest. My daughter is now 14, but just last night we were talking about how, when she was three, I lay down with her every night on her tiny toddler mattress and held her hand as she fell asleep. I remember at the time having "preemptive nostalgia" - that sense of already missing the present moment. This bit of writing captures that sense so well.

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David Donoghue's avatar

Incredible story. It means so much when something resonates and i read a comment like this. Wow. Thanks for sharing.

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Frances Moore's avatar

So tender and beautiful, David.

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David Donoghue's avatar

Thank you, Frances. 🙏

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Ann Collins's avatar

Agree! You should definitely read this poem aloud, David. Or ask your spouse or a friend to read. Scary as that is for some of us, it adds such an integral human layer to the experience of a poem—like all music. Beautiful work.

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David Donoghue's avatar

Yes I agree. I do like to read them and record, just more recently it has been difficult with the little one on top of me 😅😜

Thanks so much for reading, commenting and sharing!

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Ann Collins's avatar

The First Rule of Parenting: Never wake a sleeping baby.😌💛

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Fotini Masika's avatar

So much love!!!

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Brian Funke's avatar

From the first line…beautiful!

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David Donoghue's avatar

Wow thanks Brian. Great to have you here.

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David Donoghue's avatar

🙏

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Kym VdP's avatar

Wow, so beautiful. And what a simple moment to capture in words but always so magical. Every now and then I still hold my sleeping 16month old and it's always the soft hands that stop time and my racing thoughts.

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David Donoghue's avatar

Exactly this Kym. I think its a feeling I never knew and feel I'll probably never know again in the same way once I am through this phase of life. Good to capture and keep.

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The Sea in Me    (Síodhna)'s avatar

'Holding me down in the winds that toss my uncut hair and the long days that keep it.'

These magical days, David.

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David Donoghue's avatar

Thanks so much Siodhna!

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Dr. Deborah Hall's avatar

I am stunned and deeply moved.

You are utterly.original.

Brilliant. Beautiful.

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David Donoghue's avatar

Wow Deborah that is very kind of you. Thanks so much.

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The Sea in Me    (Síodhna)'s avatar

Lovely to hear this read back, David those lovely parental moments, that closeness, the journey

'holding me, setting me free' ⚡

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