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The Sea in Me's avatar

Lovely David - the intrigue of the story

'and the crowd called out for more' ⚡

David Donoghue's avatar

Thanks so much :) !!

Thalia Toha's avatar

David- Heavy hopes indeed. This rings true. And timeless. I appreciate this.

David Donoghue's avatar

Wow thank you so much for your comment and for dropping in to read, i really appreciate it!

Sarah Howard Lapine's avatar

The imagery is intriguing! Especially those pennies and the gaze and the withered bill. Curious and passionate.

David Donoghue's avatar

Thanks Sarah! Means a lot to have your comments and for reading 🙏

Treasa's avatar

'Heaving hearts and heavy hopes.' this is one of those lines I wish was mine, getting to read it as yours is just as good though.

David Donoghue's avatar

:) I think we all just happen to find the lines waiting for us out there in the universe. Happy to share what little I’ve found.

Will Boucher's avatar

love the idea of exploding bulbous and ripe into a space...lovely work!

David Donoghue's avatar

Thanks so much will!

LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

This is marvelous, so mysterious and textured.

David Donoghue's avatar

:) It'd be no fun if I just spelled it out. :D Thanks so much for coming and reading and commenting LeeAnn! It means a huge amount.

LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

I agree. The mystery is part of what makes it so good.

Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Lovely. That last stanza really got to me.

David Donoghue's avatar

Thanks so much, Margaret.

James Hart's avatar

Very nice, David! I like the brokenness of the lines and how they go together; has a nice organic kind of a feel to it.

David Donoghue's avatar

That's great to hear, I did take note of that when writing and wanted to explore a bit more in that area.. so it's nice to see it come through.

Danielle ⛈️'s avatar

So lovely, David!! Anticipation bloomified 🪻 Thanks for sharing!! XO

David Donoghue's avatar

Great to hear, Danielle! Thank you for reading and commenting!