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Sarah Howard Lapine's avatar

The pace of this and the way it mirrors the words you chose - annihilate, dominate, conquered. You're very good at creating a rhythm that reflects the feeling in your words. I noticed that with your last poem,"Home." Some inspiration to play with that more in my own writing!

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Daniel Henderson's avatar

This was an amazing read! The descriptions and imagery were so visceral and powerful. The set up in the first stanza, straight to the point with strong word choice that I completely understood the context and the stakes. The second stanza, all show and no tell, the short and sudden sensory imagery convey the physical toil very well and the final stanza is a well worthy pay off. This is one of my favorites from you thus far!

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